Good start...
You need a lead-line. Toss in a high-pitched instrument, like a flute or electric guitar to round this out. Other than that, it's just repetition. Like listening to a Bob Dylan guitar line, without Bob doing any singing. Even HE knew enough to pick up a harmonica when that happened!
Yeah... I have a tendency of not making lots of starts to songs and never actually finishing anything. I'm not so new, but I still don't reeeeeaaalllllyy know what u mean by lead-line
Good base, but...
You've obviously got some musical ability, but the pad you chose as the background is...well...annoying. You've also got your levels WAY too high! Add some compression to even it out a bit.
Hehe, thanks for the help, I am quite new to this stuff so thanks a lot for telling me (:
Wicked guitar skillz!
I love the sound you've come up with here...gritty in the extreme, while actually showing some real musical proficiency. That's something so very few grunge tunes actually do. I may be forced to steal a guitar riff or two, hope you don't mind!
Thanks! As pretty much always with my songs, the rythm guitar is very simple since I have to able to play as I sing in a live situation :D Lead guitars are usually improvised. Hearing this song for the longest time I gotta say, I'm pretty pleased with my playing! Vox aren't too bad either although they're a little off there and there. What mostly bothers me with my older songs are the lyrics. I feel like everytime I write new lyrics they're better than the previous ones. These are pretty old by now and some parts seem a little...stupid :D But the chorus is still pretty good, that's got to mean something!
Anyway, thanks for the review, I got a little lost there and started reviewing my own song :'D
That something extra....
This one has it! You've got some great subtlety going here...this is the type of thing I'd expect to hear as a sci-fi fight scene track. Like so many other artists on NG, you do need some kind of live vocal or instrument to give the impression that it wasn't done on your home computer (I know, it likely was...but a decent vocal gives the IMPRESSION that it wasn't....nowadays, that's really all the industry people have to go on when it comes to why they get paid and you don't!). Keep it up!
Thank you! It means a lot. I do agree, about the live vocals/instrument E.T.C. The thing is, I'm not looking to get well known or anything. I just to this as something fun to have when I'm bored or something. But thank you all the same. I appreciate it!
Bass Nectar, anyone?
Not a bad start (you're looking for feedback, so I'm reviewing it as a work in progress). First, kill your lead instrument! The melody is right, the instrument is not. The deep bass beat you have going is done with HQ samples, but the lead makes it sound like an 8-bit piece. Second, keep that beat! It's awesome! Third, if I were you, I'd pull some speech samples...maybe political rallies or movie clips. This has that kind of epic, tense feel...Last, build a bridge. I know you're just starting on this, you've got a good verse. Needs chorus and bridge.
Hope that's helpful!
-Ceevro
Yea I'm not overly happy with the sound of the lead but I like the melody, much appreciated comment.
Well arranged
You've got something thoroughly listenable here! Yes, you do need to fix the timing, which is noticably off, and perhaps add a couple timpany rolls as accents. Overall, a very pleasant and moreover GREAT for use by anyone doing screenplay work, tune. Keep doing this, and you'll do well!
hmm, I'll follow ur advice with the timpani and address the timing. Also noted about
it in my reply to Pgtblink, that it is 3 on 4. but that I changed an instrument before so it could be off, i'll give it a check.
In a nutshell...
Well formulated...catchy...delivers all it says in the title! You have a winner here!
Thank you sir
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