Thoughts while listening:
Sounds early '90s. Your bass-auto is out-of-sync with the beat. Adjust the metronome on it. Throwing the rhythm off like that kills the listenability, and if this is supposed to be a dance piece, it's important that people can catch the beat, so they can dance. Not a bad solo section. Sudden cut-off at 2:00 did not work. Sounds like the speakers suddenly died. At points like that, you really need some echo/reverb to keep the sound going. A full minute of outro is a bit much.
Thoughts after listening:
Some Improvements;
-Gotta sync that bass. Makes it almost unlistenable.
-Do SOMETHING with the percussion! There's a reason drummers put fills in. The percussion section of any band can make/break the performance, and being lazy towards the percs will cost your music dearly.
-The song never really goes anywhere. This sounds like the kind of background music they use in cheesy construction company safety training videos...cheap and easy to make a lot of.
-There very definitely needs to be more orchestration here. There's a whole lotta instruments out there, and you would do well to fill-out the sound.
Some good things;
-You've got the scales down, correct notes and good harmonic understanding.
-The lead-line was actually quite interesting.
-Your use of flanger did help with keeping it interesting.
-For only six samples, this is very good work.
Overall, this sounds like a rough idea that needs substantial polishing to stick out. The lead-line is worth salvaging, though, if you are willing to put in the effort.
2/5,
-Ceevro