Notes while listening:
-Intro needs a bit more complex of a chord progression...mostly in the rhythm of the chords. Think of your chords as a drum beat, and you'll see how the same chords with a less predictable rhythm can really enhance your song.
-Lead line...pleasant...to alter it a bit more, try adding a bit of flanger to it.
-Drumbeat: Where are the fills? I know there are a couple, but fills are where you can REALLY get creative and show your chops!
OK, now for the full review:
This is a wonderful start! There's so very much that can be done with the gorgeous melody here that I almost wanna steal it and do it all acoustically! The overall feel of the song reminds me of the end of a Sega Genesis-Era videogame. It sounds very much like the over-happy type of ending, where you get some pretty pictures of the heroes celebrating. Yeah, sentimental is the word.
Now, it needs some edge. It's very simple, which is not necessarily a bad thing, but I've found, as a musician, that when one plays a simple note, it can't just be held, but it needs to be MILKED for everything it can be! If I were to try this sort of melody on acoustic guitar, I'd have to pull out every single dynamic trick I know to keep it interesting, and that's what you, as a mixer, need to be doing as well. I recommend going over the whole. damn. track, note-by-note, and messing with volume, tremolo, bend, attack, EVERYTHING in order to make every lead-line note a special and memorable one.
I'm sorry if this sounds harsh...I really do love the overall composition. It's solid already. But to take it from solid to pro, there's more work to be done!
R4R. 3.5/5
-Ceevro